Here are several short texts with the a few corrections already made.
There are two versions of each short text. One should remain so that comparisons can be easily made. The other (the first version) is meant to be changed. Try to improve the texts by using a larger range of vocabulary and structures (you no longer need to worry about the number of sentences!). I have underlined some words and phrases, but feel free to change other things as well. Also feel free to expand on the text, adding information.

Remember, you need to go back and check tenses, agreement, etc, every time you make a change!


You can look at the 'history' of the document to see what changes have been made so far and by whom. You can also make comments or add questions under 'discussion'.

If you want to add a text of yours and see how it could be improved, then send it to me and I'll make a new page for it, or if you feel you are able, open a new page and add it yourself :-)

It was 2am when the doorbell rang...




...and nobody opened the door. The witching hour had already passed and the ghost was obviously late. Where on earth were all the people tonight?Unsuccessfully he went away and never came back again. That was the story of the delayed ghost.

"Where on earth..." :-D I love it!!!
I like 'the witching hour'! The delayed ghost is also explained before the phrase is used. Now anything you can do about the second half? Or try another change in the first half.


The door kept being closed. The... Unsuccessfully he left and was never seen again. And so did the sad story of the delayed ghost end.
This means it was opened and closed again and again and again! If he left unsuccessfully, did he leave at all? You need a different adjective here.


...and nobody opened it. The delayed ghost waited stupidly. Nothing happened, so he went away and never came back anymore. That was the story of the delayed ghost.



I awoke with a start, the bell's clear-sounding noise made my hair stand on end and I jumped out of bed. The moon was shinging through the window, showing me the way to the door. The bell rang again. At the door I heard my husband crying, "Please, darling, I've forgotten my key! Would you please let me in?" I pulled on my dressing-gown, tied the sash and made my way down the steep, narrow staircase. I opened the door a crack and handed him his pyjama.

'I came down to earth' isn't quite appropriate. 'Down to earth is an English idiom meaning 'practical and realistic': a down-to-earth person.(from wikipedia)
Which noise is it that made your hair stand on end? Not clear. The second half is great! Any other tries at it? Can anyone find a more appropriate beginning?
I woke up with a start... - great! Even better: I awoke ...

I jumped out of bed and my hair stood up on end. The moon was shining through the window showing me the way to the door. The bell rang again and my husband cried, "Please, darling, I've forgotten my key!" I opened the door and handed him his pyjama.



Quickly I jumped out of the bed and ran downstairs to let the bear come in. After receiving the money case, I handed out the rocket. He was completely overwhelmed and bursted out in tears. At last, he fired the rocket, flew to the moon to save and cherish his second family.

The changes are good. I like 'completely overwhelmed' :-) Two corrections to make: Finally,he fired the rocket and flew to the moon...
'At last' means you have waited for something for a long time. Any other versions?

Rapidly I lept out of the bed and hurried down to the frontdoor to let the bear come in. After getting the money case, I passed over the rocket. Entirely overtaken he started crying. Finally, he fired the rocket and flew to the moon...
front door - 2 words, I like 'entirely overtaken', but the correct expression is: "entirely overcome by emotion..."

Quickly I jumped out of bed and ran downstairs to let the bear come in. After having given me the money case, I handed out the rocket. He was so happy that tears dropped out of his eyes. So he fired the rocket, flew to the moon and saved his second family.

front entrance This would be appropriate, although you could also just separate the two words: front door



I stood up still feeling sleepy and thought it might be the neighbour having forgotten his key. Once upon I opened the door, nobody was outside. So I went back to my warm bed and thought I had had a dream. A few minutes later, it was ringing again. I opened the window and saw a strange creature all wet, lying on the ground, whispering a song. It was my son who was back from the carnival.

Look at the underlined section. Can anyone change it using 'Upon' ?

I got up still half asleep thinking the neighbour might have forgotten his key. The door once opened, I couldn't see anyone outside. So I went back to my warm bed thinking of having had a dream. Some minutes later, the doorbell rang again. This time I opened the window and looking downwards I caught sight of a strange creature all wet, lying on the ground whispering a song. It was my son coming home from carnival.
the door opened, ...; thinking I'd had ....
bearing in mind I had a dream...; Do you mean: ..bearing in mind the dream I had...?

I stood up feeling still sleepy and thought it might be the neighbour having forgotten his key. But when I opened the door, nobody was outside. So I went back to my warm bed and thought I had a dream. But a few minutes later, it was ringing again. I opened the window and saw a strange creature all wet, lying on the ground whispering a song. It was my son coming home from the carnival.




Writing Tasks

I am writing in behalf of Steve Moss who is applying for the job with your company as a tourist guide.


The world is not the same it was used to. A lot of things have changed and therefore young people today have to deal with other issues than former generations.